One stormy night there was a little boy in the kingdom. Walking to the castle he heard a spooky sound,
“WHOOSH!”
“Anybody there?” He asked in a panic.
“WHOOSH
He sprinted, as quick as a flash, to the ginormous castle “King King!” The
castle gates opened and the knights ran out, the boy asked “Can I see the King?”
The knights took the boy to the King, the king shouted,
“What boy?”
“There’s a Vampire in the kingdom!”
“WHOOSH!”
“Help! One of the knights are gone, shouted a knight, “Let’s get inside”
The king requested that I open a cupboard door, but when I opened the
cupboard door there was a potion.
“Drink this.” The king said that it will protect us from them...
Lovely short and exciting story boys. Well done for including a similie. Also you've used some good language e.g. requested, sprinted. I don't like ginormous. Please use enormous instead. You also remembered to use inverted commas correctly and new speaker, new line. Just check your last line. Well done Mrs. Weeks
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